This week’s post is Chapter 5, Scene 6 (1.5.6). This is the end of Chapter 5.
You are a quarter of the way through Book 1 – feedback appreciated!
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End of previous scene, followed by the link to the new scene:
“I mean it. Don’t come.” Bianca allowed the raven the last misshapen cube, watched her take wing, settle on a higher branch for the night. How much was it going to cost to untangle their finances? “Concentrate on whatever it is you need to get your documentary.”
“Walk me out?”
Your bags are packed? Cold fury made it easy to avoid a scene. She let him kiss her on the colonnaded portico, lit as brightly as a night set. ‘Always keep control, pet. Choose your time.’ Anyone watching would think she was mollified.
Anyone watching would be dead wrong.
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Copyright by Alicia Butcher Ehrhardt 2013.