Monthly Archives: August 2013

Added PRIDE’S CHILDREN – Chapter 6, Scene 1

This week’s post is the beginning of Chapter 6 (1.6.1).

Chapter 5 is collected as a single file now. Individual scenes will no longer be available.

Please advise of navigation problems – or anything else. Thanks!

PRIDE’S CHILDREN Table of Contents

End of previous scene, followed by the link to the new scene:

End of Chapter 5, Scene 6

The mailman wasn’t due for hours. Who on earth?

A man. Shaggy dark hair, stocky. Head down; she couldn’t see his face. Black leather jacket and pants, helmet under his arm. Next to him a massive black-and-chrome motorcycle. A delivery?

She pushed the intercom button. “Who is it?”

He looked up. Her heart stopped.

Andrew O’Connell.

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PRIDE’S CHILDREN, Chapter 6 – …gathering his fools in one basket to see what would hatch… – Scene 1

Copyright by Alicia Butcher Ehrhardt 2013.

Showing character emotions – even more research sources – Part 3

(Part 1 is here, Part 2 is here.)

Putting the last touches on body language research:

The ChangingMinds website is a repository of learning about all forms of persuasion and influence.

I’m using the website, which, in its mission to help people understand each other and change each other’s minds, has a wealth of information about emotions and all their interconnections, ramifications, and implications (* and ** – examples below).

Because novelists participate in the job of helping people understand each other, I have found this website invaluable for developing characters. Continue reading

Showing character emotions – more research sources – Part 2

(Part 1 is here.)

I check out what emotions need body language in my handwritten notes and my rough drafts:

I analyze what I have written: Andrew is feeling bad – after all, he didn’t think to ask Grant to keep it a secret – so he displaces his anger at himself by getting angry at Grant, who ‘should have known’ not to reveal Andrew’s business. Andrew projects his own guilt onto Grant. But Grant is a superior – the director in the film for which Andrew is one of the leads – so Andrew must suppress his anger and feeling of betrayal, and his own feeling of guilt. Continue reading

Added PRIDE’S CHILDREN – Chapter 5, Scene 6

This week’s post is Chapter 5, Scene 6 (1.5.6). This is the end of Chapter 5.

You are a quarter of the way through Book 1 – feedback appreciated!

***NEW: I’m looking for a few additional beta readers. Responsibilities? To read each full chapter as I finish polishing it, give me your feedback so I can make necessary changes before it gets posted.

You also get to see chapters before anyone else – but be aware I’m a slow writer (impossible standards, I think).

The chapters are as polished technically as I can manage before feedback, so I hope there will be very few typos or other kinds of errors.

Email me at abehrhardt [at] gmail, and let me know what your specialties are. None required. Writers welcome. I hope to attract a few NON-writers, too. No pressure, time or otherwise – this is a marathon, not a sprint. My plan is to have the whole story, all three books, finished and polished by Sep. 2014.***

PRIDE’S CHILDREN Table of Contents

End of previous scene, followed by the link to the new scene:

End of Chapter 5, Scene 5

“I mean it. Don’t come.” Bianca allowed the raven the last misshapen cube, watched her take wing, settle on a higher branch for the night. How much was it going to cost to untangle their finances? “Concentrate on whatever it is you need to get your documentary.”

“Walk me out?”

Your bags are packed? Cold fury made it easy to avoid a scene. She let him kiss her on the colonnaded portico, lit as brightly as a night set. ‘Always keep control, pet. Choose your time.’ Anyone watching would think she was mollified.

Anyone watching would be dead wrong.


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PRIDE’S CHILDREN, Chapter 5 – …his feet part of iron and part of clay…, Scene 6

Copyright by Alicia Butcher Ehrhardt 2013.

What would you do with 20% more?

What would it take to make you happier?

People asked this question usually think of money. It is a cliche that most people do not feel wealthy enough – they think that if they had just 20% more money, they would feel secure and be happy.

And most people WOULD be happy – for a while. If they are very careful. If they don’t let their expectations and expenditures swell up to fill the larger abilities.

I may have been granted 20% more energy. Continue reading

Showing character emotions – research sources – Part 1

Nuance, nuance, nuance. The writer’s job is to cause emotion in the reader. Period.

Understanding emotions is the underlying motive for all storytelling, a skill necessary for humans to live in groups. A learned skill, with presets for understanding built into most babies. A problem for people who don’t pick up – or consciously ignore – social cues.

And one of the reasons, again, that there are few writing prodigies – and the few who manage to convey emotions in writing are handling very basic human emotions, not complex ones (IMHO). Continue reading

DragonFlys – Holly’s new home’s page

This is the beginning of a new feature: my friend Holly is building a tiny home on wheels, named DragonFlys. Until she has a bit more time, you can follow the progress here. Or click on the DragonFlys tab on the navigation bar.

Here is a picture from assembling the floor:

P1010056A previous post with pictures from the Tumbleweed workshop in Philadelphia is here. And here.

I’ll post the photos from my camera (which serves as a reminder to make sure I have a good set when I go take pictures). Holly’s wonderful little camera – living with Holly – has lots more great pictures, since that’s my job: taking pictures with her camera.

She will send me text and photos when she can, and I’ll post them here until she gets her own blog going. There is just never enough time, is there?

Revising a scene is driven by my need for novelty

It just occurred to me that I NEED novelty every day – why else would I go surfing the web, looking for someone, anyone, to say something new and interesting?

What am I searching for when I surf? Novelty.

I’m looking for the perfect post to read: Continue reading

WeSeWriMo: setting goals to improve writing

I am participating in my first writing challenge: EpiGuide’s WeSeWriMo (Web Serial Writing Month)* for August 2013.

The whole point of taking on challenges is to improve one’s writing. It seems obvious, but it isn’t.

In the enthusiasm of starting something new, of joining an active community, of setting goals and getting the badge and reading everyone else’s introduction, it is easy to overlook that each and every bit of the expenditure of additional energy (cribbed from somewhere at astronomical cost) is wasted unless the final product is better and more abundant than what would have resulted if I had just buckled down every day and done my writing.

So I’m choosing to: Continue reading